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Can you hear me
Listen
Listen to my cries
Hear me
Feel my pain
See your neglect
Understand what you've put me through
Hear me roar
My anger bouncing off the wall
My sadness ringing in
Your deaf ears
Can't you hear me
Do you just not care
Listen to me
Listen
Don't walk away
I'm not finished
If only you'd hear me
If only I could make you see
Why won't you listen
Why don't you care
Do you not see the tears
I'm shedding
You're the one that's made to care
It's your job
Why can't you just listen

Maybe you can't hear me
Yeah
That's it
I'm just not loud enough
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JoKuLFrOsTiGuArDiAn Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you hit home. considering my bestfriend, basicly the guy that is an extention of me, is ignoring me. you hit home with beautiful words.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you very much!
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s84s Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
That's me everyday... people say I'm loud and annoying, but I have to or they wont look at me...

And if they say I'm too quiet, it's because I don't want you to see my tears...

Because Nobody Listens.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student General Artist
:iconihugyouplz: They don't hear until it's too late
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s84s Featured By Owner May 2, 2013
No they don't. And that's what kills.
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CandyHeartSweetness Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student General Artist
It hurts, a lot.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
It does :icontherethereplz:
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CandyHeartSweetness Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
XD there, there...
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
:iconimhappyplz: That is how I comfort people, but normally it do it with whatever is in my hand XD
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CandyHeartSweetness Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
XD Nice!
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RollingTomorrow Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for submitting to the Critique Folder at :iconwriters--club:! :la:

There was definitely a lot of emotion in this piece. :nod: You did a good job of conveying that and your ending note made for a good, strong conclusion. However, even for a piece like this with a stream of consciousness feeling, it could be good to use a wider variety of words. It'd help make every line stand out as more important to the entire piece. Also, you could consider adding question marks the the interrogative lines more poignant.

Nevertheless, good work with this piece! Keep writing!


*TheFinalHikari
Founder of #Writers--club, #LandoftheSky, and #Live-Love-Write
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for the feed back, highly appreciated
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samiispecialz Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
awah... these depressing times..
//sorry i'm not trying to be a 'know-it-all' its just that i love poetry!//
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconteatimeplz: But through these times comes art
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samiispecialz Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Yep yep it does^^*
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Mis-Iesje Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so beautiful. I touches me.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you :heart:
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KuemomoShousa Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know what this is like... All of your poetry seems to touch me in all of the places to make me fall apart...
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :)
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fallrose Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
Wow! amazing! you described my relationship with my parents.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you!~:heart:
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fallrose Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
your welcome
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Very strong words and well expressed. I wrote a poem titled Listen, but mine's about heartbreak though. Great writing.

Sincerely,
Darkys Black
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you!~:heart:
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
-whispers shyly- your welcome
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VerVerGinger Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Perfectly describes what I'm feeling right now
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you~:heart:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Emotional and heartfelt for sure...
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Most welcome... :dance:
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evilsqirrel Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012
I hate to sound like a [bleep] here, but I thought of Legend of Zelda...
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Lol, no worries, different people get different things outta it and if it reminds you of that then that's just fine. :icongrin--plz:
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evilsqirrel Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012
I just thought of the little fairy with the "hey, listen!" and could not stop laughing.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
:rofl: That is pretty funny ain't it?
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Slayer730 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You captured exactly what was caged in my heart. Thank you.
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem :thanks:
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winry3ed Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012
OHMERGERSH !!!!!! I know tht feeling too well this was amazing <3 :'D
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! :icongrin--plz:
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argxry Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
love it, im lost for words, though id have to say those last 4 lines just top it all straight off :D
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh thank you... thank you :iconimhappyplz:
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Haddonfielder Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really beautiful words, I love this ! ♥ :iconclapplz:
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you very much!
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Haddonfielder Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're really welcome ! c:
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LilithHatchersoon Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wonderful
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Out-Of-Earths-Reach Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you :heart:
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colorful-scarf Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012
wonderful words and easy to understand!
And thanks for the watch :)
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